Honest feedback. I have read fantasy since childhood and while as an author what is going on is clear to you I am sure, I find the story vague and confusing and not very readable. As compared to the clarity of let’s say Ursula K. Le Guin(a high bar, I know) or the fictional writings of John Michael Greer.
Honest feedback. I have read fantasy since childhood and while as an author what is going on is clear to you I am sure, I find the story vague and confusing and not very readable. As compared to the clarity of let’s say Ursula K. Le Guin(a high bar, I know) or the fictional writings of John Michael Greer.
Ouch.
Perhaps more initial world building, more description, a slower start setting the scene up at the beginning might be good